Written+Language

Include work samples below from your students.
Jill's example of using hyperlinking in powerpoint to make pick-a-path or non linear powerpoint presentations. This process has been used to model explanation writing, narrative and descriptive writing.

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HI, after our session last week, I went back to class and introduced the first step to the "Writing Recipe" We spent quite a bit of time talking about this first step and then using our 'eye cam' to see the scene. We then looked at our corelitmod ietherpad and read these. The children were keen to get onto their own pad. I split the class into 4 groups, showed them how to log in, change colour etc and then let them go! Some of the children did really well and I was happily surprised by some of the less enthusiastic writers in my class. Here are a few screen shots of some of the writing pads. Posted by Alicia



These are just 3 screen shots of our work.


 * WOW!!! Well done to Mrs Howard's class. This is a great first effort at using the recipe for your writing. Writing is all about making pictures in your readers heads, and some of you certainly made some strong pictures for me with the words you used. Levi I could really see those colourful parrots swooping and gliding - it reminded me of a holiday in Australia years ago when I visited a bird park and had bright coloured rosellas and other parrots landing on my head. **
 * Sunny I could see those waves shining in the sun and I hope I get to see some of those for real this weekend as we are heading to Waihi Beach. Kheva I could just fell that handful of wind - the gusts are just like that. Helen I could just imagine those sand storms twisting the trees. As a person who doesn't like too much hot sun I could empathise with those trees wanting to get to the cool water, Clifford. Asenia I really liked the contrast you made between the sounds when the wind was blowing and then the sudden silence as it stopped. Grace I could just imagine all that candy and lollipops spilling out everywhere - it made me think about "Charlie and the Chocolate Factory" - that might be a good book to read to see how Roald Dahl described scenes inside the chocolate factory. We can learn a lot from reading other people's writing. Andrew and Cian, although yoru stories were very short, you had started touse interesting words - I could feel the heat in that boiling hot fire, and again I was reminded of Charlie and the Chocolate Factory with that fat girl nearly exploding with sweets. **
 * So well done to Mrs H and her class. I hope you will add more of your writing here as you try other ways of writing. **

//** Great stuff Alicia! Is your class digital? My big frustration is access to computers! Anyway I wanted to share one of the etherpads I did with a group in my class. However I did it quite early on so thought the use of etherpad was to inspire collaborative writing (although have subsquently used it how it was intended). So my first sample can be viewed at: [] **// //** I can't seem to import it in like you have Alicia....Advice?? **//
 * Cheers, **
 * Another 'Mrs H' (Mrs Hammonds) **

//** Hi Meika, **// //** I think Alicia just used screen captures so I've grabbed yours for you: **// //** I so loved Cheyenne's opening - squished is such an expressive word, and the idea of magic is always powerful. The others have enjoyed playing with the theme and I like the way that the conclusion alludes to the idea of the magic being a dream. I hope you have gone on to do more of this with your class. it would be great to see their later efforts to compare. **// //**Cheers, Jill**//